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The charts illustrate different weight groups between English men and women from 1993 to 2002.

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The charts illustrate different weight groups between English men and women from 1993 to 2002. In 1993, there were more healthy men than women, 50% compared to 40%. After 9 years, the figures of both genders dropped remarkably to 39% and 31%. Meanwhile, the number of women who were overweight was higher than men in 1993. In the next 9 years, both of them witnessed a slight rise. Overweight men accounted for 48 % of the weight group while overweight women accounted for 50%. Between 1993 and 2002, the proportion of obese men and women had the same uptrend. In 1993, obese men and women accounted for 10% of the weight group and the rate of both sexes rose to approximately 18% after 9 years. There were no men and women in dangerously obese group in 1993 and the figure remained the same in 2002. Overall, in a period of 9 years, healthy weight population had a downtrend while the proportion of obese people increased signigicantly.
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from 1993 to 2002.

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, 50% compared to 40%. After 9 years, the figures of both genders dropped
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who were overweight was higher than
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in 1993. In the
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accounted for 48 % of the
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while overweight
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accounted for 50%.

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obese
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men
and
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women
had the same uptrend. In 1993,
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accounted for 10% of the
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and the rate of both sexes rose to approximately 18% after 9 years. There were no
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in 1993 and the figure remained the same in 2002.

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population had a downtrend while the proportion of
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