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The pie graph below shows the results of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which girls participate.

The pie graph below shows the results of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which girls participate. N1Ay
Overall, it can be seen that equal quantities of both sexes enjoyed listening to music but a dramatically larger number of girls likes reading rather than boys. To begin with, most of the boys like to play computer games about 34%, To contrast, the ratio of girls was lower at 16%. There are same proportion of listening music for both boys and girls, with 10%. This is the same with Skateboarding in boys and Gymnastics in girls, approximately 11%. Moreover, reading is the least popular in boys cultural and leisure activities at 2%, while the percentage of reading in girls increases significantly at 21%. Boys participate in Basketball as the same percentage in girls of Dancing around 26% and 27%, respectively. 15% of Girls play Netball and the same proportion in boys soccer at 17%.
Overall
, it can be
seen
that equal quantities of both sexes enjoyed listening to music
but
a
dramatically
larger number of
girls
likes reading
rather
than boys.

To
begin
with, most of the
boys
like to play computer games about 34%, To contrast, the ratio of
girls
was lower at 16%. There are same proportion of listening music for both
boys
and
girls
, with 10%. This is the same with Skateboarding in
boys
and Gymnastics in
girls
, approximately 11%.

Moreover
, reading is the least popular in
boys
cultural and leisure activities at 2%, while the percentage of reading in
girls
increases
significantly
at 21%.
Boys
participate in Basketball as the same percentage in
girls
of Dancing around 26% and 27%,
respectively
. 15% of
Girls
play Netball and the same proportion in
boys
soccer at 17%.
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IELTS academic The pie graph below shows the results of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which girls participate.

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