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The diagram illustrates the manual process of how shoes are manufactured and sent for sale.

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The diagram illustrates the manual process of how shoes are manufactured and sent for sale. Overall, shoes production is time consuming process that undergoes various stages. It is starting from choice of design and culminating in the sale. In the first stage of making shoes, shoes are designed by means of computer. Then, raw materials such as Stanley leather, mill fabric and rubber sole from divergent industries to one factory. Afterthat, various shape of these sole formed by stiching machine. After, these upper parts attached with bottoms by glue. Subsequently, shoes are packed into boxes before loading into the containers which has 5500 pairs of shoes. Next, these containers stored in the factory. Then, shoes are export to the shops for selling. These whole process consumes 18 months.
The diagram illustrates the manual process of how
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shoes
are manufactured
and
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sent
for sale.

Overall
,
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shoes
production is
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time consuming
process that undergoes various stages. It is starting from choice of design and culminating in the sale.

In the
first
stage of making
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shoes
,
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shoes
are designed
by means of computer. Then, raw materials such as Stanley leather, mill fabric and rubber sole from divergent industries to one factory.
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Afterthat
, various shape of these sole formed by
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stiching
machine.
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After
, these upper parts attached with bottoms by glue.

Subsequently
,
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shoes
are packed
into boxes
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before
loading into the containers which has 5500 pairs of
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shoes
.
Next
, these containers stored in the factory. Then,
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shoes
are export to the shops for selling. These whole process consumes 18 months.
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IELTS academic The diagram illustrates the manual process of how shoes are manufactured and sent for sale.

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4 paragraphs
128 words
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