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The pie charts show the percentages of agricultural production in two regions

The pie charts show the percentages of agricultural production in two regions rYaBp
The pie chart compares the Eastern Region and the Western Region of a country in terms of production in agriculture. It is noticeable that each area concentrates on different products. The Eastern Region has a slightly more even distribution among products than the Western Region does. In the Eastern Region, the top two products are meat, making up 35% of total agricultural production, and dairy, making up 30% of the total. While meat contributes the same propotion, the percentage of dairy in the Western Region halves that in the Eastern Region. In the Western Region, grain is the most significant part of the chart, accouting for 45%, which is three times higher than that in the Eastern Region. By contrast, vegetables is the smallest segment in total production, with only 5%, whereas it is recorded 20% in the Eastern Region.
The pie chart compares the Eastern
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and the Western
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of a country in terms of production in agriculture.

It is noticeable that each area concentrates on
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products. The Eastern
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has a
slightly
more even distribution among products than the Western
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does.

In the Eastern
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, the top two products are meat, making up 35% of total agricultural production, and dairy, making up 30% of the total. While meat contributes the same
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, the percentage of dairy in the Western
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halves that in the Eastern Region.

In the Western
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, grain is the most significant part of the chart,
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accouting
for 45%, which is three times higher than that in the Eastern
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. By contrast, vegetables is the smallest segment in total production, with
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5%, whereas it
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20% in the Eastern
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IELTS academic The pie charts show the percentages of agricultural production in two regions

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