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The pie charts show the instructure of the London Symphony Orchestra in 1960 and 2010.

The pie charts show the instructure of the London Symphony Orchestra in 1960 and 2010. W8gEK
The pie charts described the structural transformation of the London Symphony Orchestra between 1960 and 2010. Overall, percussion was the only group to maintain its proportion while the others witnessed significant change. Despite changes, strings instrument still prove to be the most type because its figure led in both years. There are increases in the proportion of strings, keyboard and extra instrument. After five decades, strings still topped the chart in 1960-35% and in 2010-40%, being the dominant type of instruments in the orchestra. Experiencing the same 5% surge in rate, keyboard section finally accounted for 10%, leaving initial smallest portion for addition instruments, which did not appear in 1960 and occupied 5% in 2010. Unlikely to three groups above, woodwinds, brass and percussion had different shifting trends. Whilst 15% of the London Symphony Orchestra were percussionists had no change in haft a century, brass and woodwinds players which took up a fifth ad a fourth of the organization underwent sharp reduction and share the same percentage of 15% in 2010.
The pie charts
described
the structural transformation of the London Symphony Orchestra between 1960 and 2010.
Overall
, percussion was the
only
group to maintain its proportion while the others witnessed significant
change
. Despite
changes
, strings
instrument
still
prove to be the most type
because
its figure led in both years. There are increases in the proportion of strings, keyboard and extra
instrument
. After five decades, strings
still
topped the chart in 1960-35% and in 2010-40%, being the dominant type of
instruments
in the orchestra. Experiencing the same 5% surge in rate, keyboard section
finally
accounted for 10%, leaving initial smallest portion for addition
instruments
, which did not appear in 1960 and occupied 5% in 2010. Unlikely to three groups above, woodwinds, brass and percussion had
different
shifting trends. Whilst 15% of the London Symphony Orchestra were percussionists had no
change
in haft a century, brass and woodwinds players which took up a fifth ad a fourth of the organization underwent sharp reduction and share the same percentage of 15% in 2010.
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