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Cnges in the population of people aged 65 and above in three countries – Canada, Germany and the UK

Cnges in the population of people aged 65 and above in three countries – Canada, Germany and the UK 7L0pY
The table shows the changes in the population of people aged 65 and above in three countries – Canada, Germany and the UK, in the years 1988 and 2000. It also displays an estimated percentage of the population in the year 2030. Overall, the population of elderly people seems to increase with each passing year. Germany seems to have the most stable growth – with 20. 45% of the entire population accounts for elderly people in 1988, and 25. 32% of that in 2000. In 2030, Germany is estimated to have around 30. 42% of elderly people in total. Germany is also predicted to have the highest number of elderly people among the three countries, by 2030. In the case of Canada, the population of elderly people in 1988 and 2000 are 16. 32% and 20. 67%, respectively. It is estimated to be 26. 35% by 2030. The UK showed the least growth in population from 1988 to 2000. The country started with 14. 23% in 1988 and only rose to a mere 14. 89% by 2000. Elderly people in the UK are estimated to be around 20. 35% by 2030, which is the least when compared to the estimations of Canada and Germany.
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Canada, Germany and the UK, in the years 1988 and 2000. It
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percentage of the
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seems to increase with each passing year. Germany seems to have the most stable growth
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in 1988, and 25. 32% of that in 2000. In 2030, Germany is
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among the three countries, by 2030.

In the case of Canada, the
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in 1988 and 2000 are 16. 32% and 20. 67%,
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to be 26. 35% by 2030.

The UK
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the least growth in
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from 1988 to 2000. The country
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with 14. 23% in 1988 and
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rose to a mere 14. 89% by 2000.
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to be around 20. 35% by 2030, which is the least when compared to the estimations of Canada and Germany.
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IELTS academic Cnges in the population of people aged 65 and above in three countries – Canada, Germany and the UK

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