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The pie charts show the information about the the ratio of the energy produced by different sources in a different countries from 1985 and 2003

The pie charts show the information about the the ratio of the energy produced by different sources in a different countries from 1985 and 2003 QLyNX
The circular representations depit the information about the fraction of the energy was generated by various resource in a nation in eighteen years. Overall, it is a noticeable that, the most of the energy was produced through oil whereas, the least fraction of energy was generated by other renewable resources in the given time period. Looking into details, In 1985, the maximum proportion of the power was manufactured thought oil, which was recorded at 52%. but, the minimum fraction of energy was produced by other renewable resources was only 1%. The 13% of energy was generated by natural gas in the same time period. The ratio of the energy was produced thought nuclear. which was registered at 22%. The percentage of the power was manufactured by coal and hydrogen was 8% and 4% in 1985. Glancing ahead, the fraction of the power was generated through oil was 39% in 2003. but, it increased by 13% in 1985. The lower percentile of the energy was manufactured by others renewable, which was stood at 4%. The ratio of the power was generated by natural and nuclear gas was 23% and 17% in 2003. The producers of the energy through hydrogen was remained similar in the given time period. The 13% of power was produced by coal in 2003.
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produced
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energy
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generated
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time period. Looking into
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, In 1985, the maximum proportion of the
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power
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oil, which
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energy
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produced
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1%. The 13% of
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generated
by natural gas in the same time period. The ratio of the
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produced
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nuclear.
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which
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at 22%. The percentage of the
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power
was manufactured
by coal and hydrogen was 8% and 4% in 1985. Glancing ahead, the
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fraction
of the
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power
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generated
through oil was 39% in 2003.
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, it increased by 13% in 1985. The lower percentile of the
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energy
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by others renewable, which
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at 4%. The ratio of the
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by natural and nuclear gas was 23% and 17% in 2003.
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