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Olympic Medals Data Review

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The total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries as shown by the graph indicates that most of medals were granted to the United States. If we look at the medals categories we can see that in the gold category: Large number of gold medals were obtained by the United States of America, followed by the Soviet Union, China, uk, Hungary and east grermany. The United States leads in the silver and bronze category as well. The Soviet Union follows the lead of the United States to become second in the gold, silver and bronze categories. In the contrary to what is believed that China harbours most Olympic winning athletes the data shows that China is not leading in this domain, on the other hand United Kingdom is harbouring the third most winned medals in the Olympic. In summary the data provided shows that most medals in the Olympic were gained by the United States of America followed by the Soviet Union.
The total number of Olympic
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medals
won by twelve
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different
countries as shown by the graph indicates that most of
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medals
were granted
to the
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United
States.

If we look at the
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medals
categories we can
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see
that in the gold category:

Large number of gold
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medals
were obtained
by the
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United
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States
of America, followed by the Soviet Union, China,
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uk
, Hungary and east
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grermany
.

The
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United
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States
leads in the silver and bronze category
as well
. The Soviet Union follows the lead of the
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United
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States
to become second in the gold, silver and bronze categories.

In the contrary to what
is believed
that China
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harbours
most Olympic winning athletes the data
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shows
that China is not leading in this domain,
on the other hand
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United
Kingdom is
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harbouring
the third most
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winned
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medals
in the Olympic.

In summary the data provided
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shows
that most
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medals
in the Olympic
were gained
by the
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United
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States
of America followed by the Soviet Union.
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IELTS academic Olympic Medals Data Review

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