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The pie charts illustrates the percentage of visitors to Ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished .

The pie charts illustrates the percentage of visitors to Ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. nXbBn
Overall, it can be clearly seen that most of the visitors satisfied with the museum during the year after refurbishment rather than before year. In the year before refurbishment, 40 percent individuals dissatisfied with the Ashdown museum and the percentage of satisfied people was 30%. Then, 15% masses very satisfied with the museum and 5 percent people no response about the museum. Approximately 10% masses very dissatisfied with the Ashdown museum. In the year after refurbishment, the percentage of very dissatisfied people and no response about the museum were the same with 5 percent. Further, more than 30% people very satisfied with the Ashdown museum and the percentage of satisfied people was 40%. Less than 20 percent masses dissatisfied with the Ashdown museum.
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IELTS academic The pie charts illustrates the percentage of visitors to Ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished.

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