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The maps below show changes that took place in Denham from 1995 until present

The maps below show changes that took place in Denham from 1995 until present DwMyj
The supplied maps elaborate changes in Denham from 1995 to present. Overall, Denham has been modernized over a 25 year period whilst the main changes have seen near the sea. On the one hand, looking at behind there was a farmland in the east-north of the city which has been enhanced and connected to forest park and replaced with a golf court and tennis sport center, respectively. Moreover, differences have been seen in the west of the city, so new way has been introduced with main road to improve transport. On the other hand, there are a plethora of changes at near sea side. Following this, shops have been redeveloped with restaurants while the hotel has been expanded and added a car park. Furthermore, at the south of the city fish market networks have been turned into apartment complex, however fishing port which was located in the sea has been dismantled last years.
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changes
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Denham
from 1995 to present.

Overall
,
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Denham
has
been modernized
over a
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25 year
period whilst the main
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changes
have
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seen
near the sea.

On the one hand, looking at behind there was a farmland in the east-north of the city which has
been enhanced
and connected to forest park and replaced with a golf court and tennis sport center,
respectively
.
Moreover
, differences have been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
in the west of the city,
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so
new way has
been introduced
with main road to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
transport.

On the other hand
, there are a plethora of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
at near sea side. Following this, shops have
been redeveloped
with restaurants while the hotel has
been expanded
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
a car park.
Furthermore
, at the south of the city fish market networks have
been turned
into apartment complex,
however
fishing port which
was located
in the sea has
been dismantled
last years.
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