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The pie charts illustrate the time spent on different activities in the given years of 1958 and 2008 .

The pie charts illustrate the time spent on different activities in the given years of 1958 and 2008. 2KM8j
Overall, it can be clearly seen that most of the time was spent on working in both the years. According to the diagrams, in 1958 adults spent most of the time on working with 33 percent and least time spent on travel to work with 2 percent. Adults spent similar time on working and sleeping with 33 percent. The percentage was 6% of other interests or playing sports. Then, adults spent 19% time with family and friends. In 2008, adults spent least time on friends and family. On the other interests or playing sports and travel to work time was similar spent with 8 percent by adults. Further, the highest percentage of working with 41%. Nextly, adults spent time on sleeping and relaxing at home with 25% and 13 percent respectively.
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19%
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with family and friends. In 2008,
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IELTS academic The pie charts illustrate the time spent on different activities in the given years of 1958 and 2008.

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