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The graph shows the percentage of female in a particular country who prefer watching sports to males who prefer participation in sports

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The given graph represents the percentage of females in a particular nation who prefer watching sports to males who prefer participation in sports. Taking a general overview, in sports the watching football is highest, whereas fishing is a lowest in party party painting in fishing is a highest, while football is a lowest in sports. In watching and participating in football is 40. 5% and 10. 5% respectively. Prefer in watching rug by is 30%, whereas the sports in participation is a decrease by 5%. In regards to basketball, the proportion of viewers and player is more balanced 37. 5% to 25% respectively. On the other hand,
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to males who prefer participation in
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. Taking a general overview, in
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sports
the watching football is highest, whereas fishing is
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a
lowest in
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painting in fishing is
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a
highest, while football is
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a
lowest in sports.

In watching and participating in football is 40. 5% and 10. 5%
respectively
. Prefer in watching rug by is 30%, whereas the
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sports
in participation is a decrease by 5%.
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In regards to
basketball, the proportion of viewers and player is more balanced 37. 5% to 25%
respectively
.

On the other hand
,
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IELTS academic The graph shows the percentage of female in a particular country who prefer watching sports to males who prefer participation in sports

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  American English
3 paragraphs
107 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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