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The pie charts illustrate the rate of different reasons for migration to/from the UK in 2007.

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The pie charts illustrate the rate of different reasons for migration to/from the UK in 2007. Overall, definite job played the most important role for both forms of migration. For instance, the left pie chart provides information on the major causes why people immigrate to the UK in the given year. As can be seen clearly, the rate of people who travelled into the UK by dint of definite job topped the chart with 30%, followed by the reason about formal study with 26%. In the same way, in the right chart, definite job was also the main motivation for emigration from the UK with 29%. While 12% of people reported that they migrated to the UK because of looking for work, in the right pie chart, this reason for emigration from the UK occupied 22%. An interesting note is that the big difference in reason between immigration and emigration is that the proportion of people who travelled into this country owing to formal study only followed by definite job, while this reason for emigration bottomed the chart.
The pie
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illustrate the rate of
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different
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reasons
for migration to/from the UK in 2007.

Overall
,
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definite
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job
played the most
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important
role for both forms of migration.

For instance
, the
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left
pie
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chart
provides information on the major causes why
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people
immigrate to the UK in the
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given
year. As can be
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seen
clearly
, the rate of
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people
who travelled into the UK by dint of
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definite
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job
topped the
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chart
with 30%, followed by the
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reason
about formal study with 26%.

In the same way
, in the right
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chart
,
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definite
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job
was
also
the main motivation for emigration from the UK with 29%. While 12% of
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people
reported that they migrated to the UK
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because
of looking for work, in the right pie
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chart
, this
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reason
for emigration from the UK occupied 22%.

An interesting note is that the
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big
difference in
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reason
between immigration and emigration is that the proportion of
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people
who travelled into this country owing to formal study
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only
followed by
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definite
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job
, while this
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reason
for emigration bottomed the
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chart
.
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IELTS academic The pie charts illustrate the rate of different reasons for migration to/from the UK in 2007.

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6.0
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