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The line graph illustrate the amount of spreads consumed from 1981 to 2007, in grams.

The line graph illustrate the amount of spreads consumed from 1981 to 2007, in grams. 3arVb
The line graph shows the information about the spreads (Margarine, Low-fat & reduced spreads, Butter) taken in years between 1981 to 2007. The unit is measured in grams. Overall, the consumption of butter was increased in starting year and after then it was decreased constantly till the end. While margarine consumption spreads went downward gradually. Low-fat & reduced spread was in demand lately and grew and remain constant. On the one hand, consumption of butter was escalated 160 grams in 1986. After then from, 1986 to 2007, it was fell down and meet at around 70 grams in 2007. In contrast, margarine consumption was around 90 grams in 1981 and little bit fluctuated in between 1986 to 2001 and declined by 40grms in 2007. On the other hand, low-fat & reduced spreads, increased constantly in 1996 by 80 grams and then slightly diminished in 2007 around 78grams.
The line graph
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shows
the information about the
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spreads
(Margarine, Low-
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fat
&
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reduced
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spreads
, Butter) taken in years
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between 1981 to 2007
. The unit
is measured
in grams.

Overall
, the
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consumption
of butter
was increased
in starting year and after then it
was decreased
constantly
till the
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end
.
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While
margarine
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consumption
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spreads
went downward
gradually
. Low-
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fat
&
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reduced
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spread
was in demand lately and grew and remain constant.

On the one hand,
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consumption
of butter
was escalated
160
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grams
in 1986. After then from, 1986 to 2007, it was fell down and
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meet
at around 70
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grams
in 2007.
In contrast
, margarine
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consumption
was around 90
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grams
in 1981 and
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little bit
fluctuated in
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between 1986 to 2001
and declined by 40grms in 2007.

On the other hand
, low-
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fat
&
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reduced
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spreads
, increased
constantly
in 1996 by 80
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grams
and then
slightly
diminished in 2007 around
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78grams
.
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IELTS academic The line graph illustrate the amount of spreads consumed from 1981 to 2007, in grams.

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