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The Graph Below Shows The Percentage Of People In The Different Age Group Who Went To The Cinema Once A Month In Great Britain.

The Graph Below Shows The Percentage Of People In The Different Age Group Who Went To The Cinema Once A Month In Great Britain. 7aRMn
The chart illustrates the rate of citizens in the four various age groups who went to see a movie once a month in Great Britain. Overall, the percentage of cinemagoers in the 15-24 age group, the 25-35 age group and the 35 and over age group rose from 1984 to 2000, while the number of the 7-14 age group increased in the period of 1894 and 1999 before dropping significantly in 2000. From 1984 to 2000, the number of 15-24 age group going to the cinema went up from 16% to over 55%. Similarly, this figure for the 35 and over age group rose from below 2% to nearly 20% in 2000. Besides, the cinema attendance of the 25-35 age group saw an increase by approximately 28% during the period despite this number stayed remain from 1994 to 1999. Having the same trend as those three age groups from 1984 to 1999, the proportion of cinemagoers in the 7-14 age group experienced an upward trend that peaked at 36% in 1999 before slightly dropped to over 30% in 2000.
The chart illustrates the rate of citizens in the four various
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who went to
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a movie once a month in Great Britain.

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in the 15-24
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, the 25-35
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and the 35 and
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rose from 1984 to 2000, while the number of the 7-14
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increased in the period of 1894 and 1999
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before
dropping
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From 1984 to 2000, the number of 15-24
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going to the cinema went up from 16% to
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55%.
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rose from below 2% to
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an increase by approximately 28% during the period despite this number stayed remain from 1994 to 1999.

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from 1984 to 1999, the proportion of
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experienced an upward trend that peaked at 36% in 1999
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30% in 2000.
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