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UNIVERSITY GRADUATES ,CANADA ,1992 -2007

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This typical graph shows the number of male and female students in canada, who had graduated from a university during the calender year 1992 to 2007. In this passage we will discuss the trends of increase in the number of graduates in males and females and will make all necessary comparisons. Firstly, if we look at the first line which shows the graph for male graduates, we will see a continuous increasing trend in the numbers apart from the year 1998 where there was a slight fall in the number. During the year 1992 there were 70000 graduates in the country which followed the increasing pattern and ended up to mid 90 thousands in the year 2006. Moving on to the second line which represents the females. The number of female graduates was way more higher than males throughout the whole comparison period. It marks the early 1 lac count during the year 1992 and observed a constant increase. Major differentiation between both the graphs is that females never had any decline in there number and marked a record 1lac 40 thousand graduates in 2006.
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, who had graduated from a university during the
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1992 to 2007. In this passage we will discuss the trends of increase in the
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all necessary comparisons.
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the graph for male
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a continuous increasing trend in the
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apart from the
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1998 where there was a slight fall in the
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. During the
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1992 there were 70000
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graduates
in the country which followed the increasing pattern and ended up to mid 90 thousands in the
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2006. Moving on to the second line which represents the
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females
. The
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of
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throughout the whole comparison period. It marks the early 1 lac count during the
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1992 and observed a constant increase. Major differentiation between both the graphs is that
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never had any decline in there
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and marked a record 1lac 40 thousand
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graduates
in 2006.
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IELTS academic UNIVERSITY GRADUATES, CANADA, 1992 -2007

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  American English
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185 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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