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The graph line provides information on demand for wheat among 3 different countries during the 5-year period.

The graph line provides information on demand for wheat among 3 different countries during the 5-year period. Wy3k5
The graph line provides information on demand for wheat among 3 different countries during the 5-year period. It is clear that the extreme alterations in demand for wheat are more noticeable in Canada. Also, while the same demand was constant, it commenced soaring by the time in European Community, and this launched to dive slowly in Australia. Although the demand for wheat was between 15 and 20 million tons in those countries in 1985-86, this index has shown a rise by completely altered for Canada in the following years, and in 1988 the necessity for wheat swelled to approximately 25 million tons. In 1988 and 1989 it is observed that the need for wheat was dropping down compared to previous years and reached 13 million tons but it grew gradually later. Even though the changes in Australia and European Community are not distinguishable by 1988, onwards 1989 a considerable leap observed in European Community, but Australia maintained its stability.
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that the extreme alterations in
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are more noticeable in Canada.
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was constant, it commenced soaring by the time in European Community, and this launched to dive
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in Australia.

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for
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wheat
was between 15 and 20 million tons in those countries in 1985-86, this index has shown a rise by completely altered for Canada in the following years, and in 1988 the necessity for
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wheat
swelled to approximately 25 million tons. In 1988 and 1989 it
is observed
that the need for
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wheat
was
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dropping down
compared to previous years and reached 13 million tons
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but
it grew
gradually
later.

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in Australia and European Community are not distinguishable by 1988, onwards 1989 a considerable leap observed in European Community,
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Australia maintained its stability.
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