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The pie charts illustrate the percentage of American factory operatives who were skilled in speaking another language moreover than English between 2010 and 2020.

The pie charts illustrate the percentage of American factory operatives who were skilled in speaking another language moreover than English between 2010 and 2020. K3yDM
The pie charts illustrate the percentage of American factory operatives who were skilled in speaking another language moreover than English between 2010 and 2020. It is clear from the chart that the number of employees who has no other language witnessed a downward trend over the given period. Besides, the language spoken had a little change. Firstly, the fraction of no other language spoken people doubled from 2010 to 2020. In comparison with French only spoken, which occupied 15% in 2010, people were able to speak more than two other languages. There was a slight increase in the part of Spanish from 30% to 35%. The proportion of indigenes speaking more than two languages in 2010 was 10%, which was doubled higher in 2020. Furthermore, both the percentage of people who can speak French and another language was 15% in 2010. The rate for German spoken leveled out and stood at 10%.
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than English between 2010 and 2020. It is
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witnessed a downward trend over the
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doubled from 2010 to 2020.
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spoken, which occupied 15% in 2010,
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were able to speak more than two other
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. There was a slight increase in the part of Spanish from 30% to 35%. The proportion of
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speaking more than two
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in 2010 was 10%, which
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higher in 2020.

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, both the percentage of
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who can speak French and another
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was 15% in 2010. The rate for German spoken leveled out and stood at 10%.
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