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The pie charts illustrate that how people of country spent their money in household activates varied from year 1950 to 2010.

The pie charts illustrate that how people of country spent their money in household activates varied from year 1950 to 2010. In the year 1950, as a regards of other means, it accounted for 4. 4% and experienced a just below fivefold rise to 19. 3% in the year of 2010. As regards of transportation it comprised of 3. 3% in 1950, which increased to 14% in 2010. the initial figure for food and health care inclined of threefold and just below twofold respectively. Additionally the charts show a huge declined of housing which had the majority of expenditure in beginning fell to 22% in 2010. As regards of education, it was scarcely declined by 0. 3% in 2010. Overall, the spent of money for food, transportation and others elevated whereas expenditure of housing got declined and proportion of education was almost in same ratio.

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 of country spent their money in household activates varied from year 1950 to 2010.

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 below fivefold rise to 19. 3% in the year of 2010. “As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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 a huge declined of housing which had the majority of expenditure in beginning fell to 22% in 2010. As regards of education, it was scarcely
 declined by 0. 3% in 2010.

Overall
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 elevated whereas expenditure of housing This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquired
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 declined and proportion of education was almost in same ratio. 

IELTS academic The pie charts illustrate that how people of country spent their money in household activates varied from year 1950 to 2010.

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American English

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145 words

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4.0

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Lexical Resource: 6.5

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Task Achievement: 5.0

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