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The pie charts illustrate some principal criteria regarding to students’ purpose to pursuit tertiary education at an institution of the UK in the year 1987 and 2007.

The pie charts illustrate some principal criteria regarding to students’ purpose to pursuit tertiary education at an institution of the UK in the year 1987 and 2007. paWAL
The pie charts illustrate some principal criteria regarding to students’ purpose to pursuit tertiary education at an institution of the UK in the year 1987 and 2007. Overall, there was an increase in the proportion of students in favor of quality of suitable degree courses and close to parental while an opposite trend was seen in the number of freshmen supporting quality of resource, quality of teaching and good sports and social activities. Despite that, the majority of students chose to enroll in the university due to suitable degree courses in both years. The number of high school leavers relying on suitable degree courses for their study started at 35 %, after which it saw a slight increase to 37% in the year 2007. The percentage of students who chose to study because of close to parental shared a similar change, but to a greater extent, with a considerable rise to 22% over 10-year period. The proportion of students who depended on quality teaching to choose this university almost halved, ending at 8% in 2007 and making this reason less favorable over the examined period. A relatively similar pattern can be seen in the figure for students prioritized quality of resource and good sports and social activities, with a remarkable decline to 17% and 6%, respectively.
The pie charts illustrate
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principal criteria
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purpose to pursuit tertiary education at an institution of the UK in the year 1987 and 2007.

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, there was an increase in the proportion of
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students
in favor of
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quality
of suitable degree courses and close to parental while an opposite trend was
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seen
in the number of freshmen supporting
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quality
of resource,
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quality
of teaching and
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good
sports and social activities. Despite that, the majority of
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students
chose to enroll in the university due to suitable degree courses in both years.

The number of high
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school leavers
relying on suitable degree courses for their study
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started
at 35 %, after which it
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saw
a slight increase to 37% in the year 2007. The percentage of
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students
who chose to study
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because
of close to parental shared a similar
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change
,
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to a greater extent, with a considerable rise to 22% over 10-year period.

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proportion of
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who depended on
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teaching to choose this university almost halved, ending at 8% in 2007 and making this reason less favorable over the examined period. A
relatively
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seen
in the figure for
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students
prioritized
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quality
of resource and
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good
sports and social activities, with a remarkable decline to 17% and 6%,
respectively
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IELTS academic The pie charts illustrate some principal criteria regarding to students’ purpose to pursuit tertiary education at an institution of the UK in the year 1987 and 2007.

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