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The pie charts describe the changes in favourite social media platforms of global Internet users. It consists of data in 2011, 2012 and 2013.

The pie charts describe the changes in favourite social media platforms of global Internet users. It consists of data in 2011, 2012 and 2013. jV0XM
The pile charts illustrate the proportion of popular social media channel with five categories (Facebook, Twitter, LinkedIn, google plus and Pinterest ). Overall, Facebook and twitter were widely used over a half of total, whereas Pinterest was least used in the given periods. In 2011, the figure for Facebook accounted for nearly a third of total (59%). Although it dropped 10% and 9% in 2012 and 2013 respectively, it was being highest proportion in the these years. On the other hand, twitter obtained 21% in 2011, after which it increased a mere 2% each for the last two years. Similarly, the modest 10% had been contributed by LinkedIn in 2011. Then it ascended to 12% and 15% in 2012 and 2013. Regarding the two social media (google and Pinterest), which were lowest applied in 2011 only at 5% for each. In 2012, google ascended double and went up to 4% in last year. Pinterest increased only 2% for each year with a tiny minority 6% and 8% individually.
The pile charts illustrate the proportion of popular social media channel with five categories (Facebook, Twitter, LinkedIn, google plus and Pinterest
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