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IELTS Writing task1 line graph

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The line graph compares the percentage of the people aged 65 and over, over a period of 60 years, from 1940 to 2040, in Japan, Sweden and the USA. Overall, the graph shows and forecasts the increase in the proportion of the population aged 65 and over, based on the past trends in these three countries up to 25%, over the period shown. In 1940, the USA had the highest aging population by 10%. While Japan had the lowest proportion of senior citizens by 5%, which decreased gradually until 1990. The percentage of population aged 65 and over in Sweden was approximately 8% in 1940, but then surpassed the other two countries' elderly population in 1995 by about 14%. Around 2015, the highest percentage of people aged 65 and over was 20% in Sweden. It is predicted that, In 2030, There is a dramatic rise in the proportion of Japanese people aged 65 and over up to around 28% in 2040. Also, the other two countries' aging populations will continue to increase. They are forecast to be up to 25% and 23% in Sweden and the USA, respectively, in 2040.
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a period of 60 years, from 1940 to 2040, in Japan, Sweden and the USA.

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and forecasts the increase in the proportion of the
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65 and
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, based on the past trends in these three countries up to 25%,
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the period shown.

In 1940, the USA had the highest aging
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population
by 10%. While Japan had the lowest proportion of senior citizens by 5%, which decreased
gradually
until 1990. The percentage of
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65 and
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in Sweden was approximately 8% in 1940,
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then surpassed the other two countries' elderly
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in 1995 by about 14%.

Around 2015, the highest percentage of
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was 20% in Sweden. It
is predicted
that, In 2030, There is a dramatic rise in the proportion of Japanese
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up to around 28% in 2040.
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will continue to increase. They are forecast to be up to 25% and 23% in Sweden and the USA,
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, in 2040.
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IELTS academic IELTS Writing task1 line graph

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
190 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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