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The pie charts depict the information of shopping sales from the internet by retailers during 2005 and 2010 in Canada.Overall,it is manifest that sales in 2010 increased in all services except in home furnishings and electronic appliances.To begin with, food and beverage witnessed a significant rise of 10percent in 2010 from near about one fourth in 2005. The sale of video games in 2005 was approximately one fifth ,which went up closer to one quarter during 2010in Canada. Moving further, online shopping of electronics and appliances in 2005 was under two fifth , however it declined to one third during 2010 sales .One quarter home furnishings sales recorded in 2005, whereas home furnishings sales reduced by 10 percent in 2010and reached at 15 percent .

The pie charts depict the information of shopping sales from the internet by retailers during 2005 and 2010 in Canada. Overall, it is manifest that sales in 2010 increased in all services except in home furnishings and electronic appliances. To begin with, food and beverage witnessed a significant rise of 10percent in 2010 from near about one fourth in 2005. The sale of video games in 2005 was approximately one fifth, which went up closer to one quarter during 2010in Canada. Moving further, online shopping of electronics and appliances in 2005 was under two fifth, however it declined to one third during 2010 sales. One quarter home furnishings sales recorded in 2005, whereas home furnishings sales reduced by 10 percent in 2010and reached at 15 percent. wNre
Travelling is an indispensable part of today's commuting life. Foreign nations are visited by number of people for getting relaxation. A part of society reckon that it has bad effects on the hosting nation. I disagree with the notion and delve my viewpoints in the upcoming paragraphs. Tourism industry, is booming, as it brings several benefits and leads to the economic development of the country. To embark on, when people travel internationally, there is a flow of money. Travellers use various facilities and, which ultimately creates employment for people involved in the tourism industry. As, travellers in foreign nations take amenities like tourist guide, hotel booking, restaurants and so on. Recent survey, conducted by BBC it is shown that tourism become a source of economic growth as well as generating revenue for the hosting authorities. Along with this, travelling internationally involves flow of rich culture among various nations. Moreover, it also makes favourable bonds among the nations. Nowadays, people travel to entertain themselves, enjoy in distinct culture and environment. Although, it involves few negative impact as the litter problem in the hosting nation, intermixing of culture, security issues etcetera. To conclude, I reiterate that though there are some negative impact of travellers to the hosting nation, but its advance serve more to the economy.
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for getting relaxation. A part of society reckon that it has
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bad
effects on the
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nation
. I disagree with the notion and delve my viewpoints in the upcoming paragraphs. Tourism industry, is booming, as it brings several benefits and leads to the economic development of the country. To embark on, when
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travel
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, there is a flow of money.
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involved in the tourism industry. As,
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travellers
in foreign
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nations
take amenities like tourist guide, hotel booking, restaurants and
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on. Recent survey, conducted by BBC it
is shown
that tourism become a source of economic growth
as well
as generating revenue for the
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hosting
authorities. Along with this, travelling
internationally
involves flow of rich culture among various
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nations
.
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makes
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bonds among the
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. Nowadays,
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people
travel to entertain themselves, enjoy in distinct culture and environment. Although, it involves few
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negative
impact as the litter problem in the
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hosting
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, intermixing of culture, security issues etcetera.
To conclude
, I reiterate that though there are
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impact of
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,
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its advance serve more to the economy.
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IELTS academic The pie charts depict the information of shopping sales from the internet by retailers during 2005 and 2010 in Canada. Overall, it is manifest that sales in 2010 increased in all services except in home furnishings and electronic appliances. To begin with, food and beverage witnessed a significant rise of 10percent in 2010 from near about one fourth in 2005. The sale of video games in 2005 was approximately one fifth, which went up closer to one quarter during 2010in Canada. Moving further, online shopping of electronics and appliances in 2005 was under two fifth, however it declined to one third during 2010 sales. One quarter home furnishings sales recorded in 2005, whereas home furnishings sales reduced by 10 percent in 2010and reached at 15 percent.

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