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The chart gives information about the percentage of overweight men and women in Australia from 1980 to 2010.

The chart gives information about the percentage of overweight men and women in Australia from 1980 to 2010. 13OG
The bar chart illustrates the rate of overweight adults in Australia, at the start of each decade, beginning in 1980. Overall, it is clear that the percentage of overweight males was significantly higher than females in each year. Additionally, the rate of both men and women who were overweight rose over the research period. In 1980, just under 50% of Australian men were overweight, compared to only about onethird of females, which were the lowest figures for each gender during the research period. Over the next 20 years, the rates of overweight male and female citizens in Australia both saw significant increases, with the figure for men reaching a peak of almost 70% in 2000. From 2000 to 2010, slightly fewer men were overweight, as illustrated by a decline of roughly 3% in 2010, whereas the figure for women remained unchanged, with exactly half of Australian women being overweight in the final year.
The bar chart illustrates the rate of
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overweight
adults in Australia, at the
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start
of each decade, beginning in 1980.

Overall
, it is
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clear
that the percentage of
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overweight
males was
significantly
higher than females in each year.
Additionally
, the rate of both
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men
and women who were
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overweight
rose over the research period.

In 1980,
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under 50% of Australian
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men
were
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overweight
, compared to
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only
about
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onethird
of females, which were the lowest figures for each gender during the research period. Over the
next
20 years, the rates of
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male and female citizens in Australia both
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saw
significant increases, with the figure for
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men
reaching a peak of almost 70% in 2000.

From 2000 to 2010,
slightly
fewer
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men
were
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overweight
, as illustrated by a decline of roughly 3% in 2010, whereas the figure for women remained unchanged, with exactly half of Australian women being
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overweight
in the final year.
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IELTS academic The chart gives information about the percentage of overweight men and women in Australia from 1980 to 2010.

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