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The pie charts compares the average amount spent by a country over a period of 20 years. The different sectors are taken into consideration such as housing, food, health care, education and so on.

The pie charts compares the average amount spent by a country over a period of 20 years. The different sectors are taken into consideration such as housing, food, health care, education and so on. peGpa
The pie charts compares the average amount spent by a country over a period of 20 years. The different sectors are taken into consideration such as housing, food, health care, education and so on. The highest amount spent by a country in the year 1950 was for housing and the least expenditure took place for health care industry in 1950 but also raised a bit for the year 2010 yet remained at last position. Food expenditure stood in the second place with a rate of 11. 2% while its rate of expendition increased to 34% by the year 2010 at the highest position. Consequently the amount spent on education sector in the year 1950 was 6. 6% decreased by 0. 3% whereas the rate of amount spent on transportation and other sectors were approximately rose by 5 times over a period of 20years. However, the investment made by the country over 20 years for health care sector stands least in the overall period with a slight increase in percentage. All in all, country increased spending it's expenses for food sector and tried to maintain health services at the least by the year 2010
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2010
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2010 at the highest position.

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in the
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1950 was 6. 6% decreased by 0. 3% whereas the rate of
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on transportation and other
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were approximately rose by 5 times over a period of 20years.

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over 20 years for
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care
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stands least in the
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increased spending
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2010

IELTS academic The pie charts compares the average amount spent by a country over a period of 20 years. The different sectors are taken into consideration such as housing, food, health care, education and so on.

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