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The pie charts below show the types of music media used from 1990 to 2010. v.1

The pie charts below show the types of music media used from 1990 to 2010. v. 1
The given diagrams show how the music had been stored and listened to using different storage units in three different decades with a 10 years interval. As can be seen, CD dominated the music storage in the 90s while MP3 became the primary means of music recording in 2010. As is observed from the given illustration, Compact Disk (abbreviated as CD) was the most widely used storage type to save and retrieve songs in the 90s. In this year more than half of the music was stored and sold using this media. One-quarter use of Cassette for music enlisted it as the second most popular music media in this year while Vinyl Record was used to record the least percentages of music. After ten years, the scenario changed dramatically and Vinyl Record and cassette were no longer used. The CD consumed the whole market and its use increased remarkably to 95% for music. MP3 was introduced in this year but only 5% of its usage to store music reflects its scarcity at that time. Finally, in 2010, MP3, also known as Digital Audio, consumed the market of CD and 60% use of this media indicates its huge popularity in the 2010s. Interestingly the Vinyl Record was back in this decade with its 5% market share to store music while the CD was still the second popular music storage type though observed a significant decrease of its use compared to 10 years ago.
The
given
diagrams
show
how the
music
had
been stored
and listened to using
different
storage
units in three
different
decades with a 10 years interval. As can be
seen
, CD dominated the
music
storage
in the 90s while MP3 became the primary means of
music
recording in 2010.

As
is observed
from the
given
illustration, Compact Disk (abbreviated as
CD)
was the most
widely
used
storage
type to save and retrieve songs in the 90s. In this
year
more than half of the
music
was stored
and sold using
this
media. One-quarter
use
of Cassette for
music
enlisted it as the second most popular
music
media in this
year
while Vinyl
Record
was
used
to
record
the least percentages of
music
. After ten years, the scenario
changed
dramatically
and Vinyl
Record
and cassette were no longer
used
. The CD consumed the whole market and its
use
increased
remarkably
to 95% for
music
. MP3
was introduced
in this
year
but
only
5% of its usage to store
music
reflects its scarcity at that time.
Finally
, in 2010, MP3,
also
known as Digital Audio, consumed the market of CD and 60%
use
of this media indicates its huge popularity in the 2010s.
Interestingly
the Vinyl
Record
was back in this decade with its 5% market share to store
music
while the CD was
still
the second popular
music
storage
type though observed a significant decrease of its
use
compared to 10 years ago.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The pie charts below show the types of music media used from 1990 to 2010. v. 1

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