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The pie charts below show the proportion of the whole school expenditure in five differences sources over the periods between 1981 and 2001. v.2

The pie charts below show the proportion of the whole school expenditure in five differences sources over the periods between 1981 and 2001. v. 2
The pie charts below show the proportion of the total school expenditure in five differences sources over the periods between 1981 and 2001. Overall, it is clear that most of the money spent on teachers’ salaries. Otherwise, the percentage of other workers’ salaries reduced gradually over 20 years. There was a slight increase in rates of insurance from 2% in 1981, 3% in 1991 to 8% in 2001. The spending on furniture and equipment dropped quickly from 15% in 1981 to 5 % in 1991 before reached the point of 23% in 2001. There was a small rise in the proportion of resources and books from 15% in 1981 to 20 % in 1991 before dramatic fall to 9% in 2001. The expenditure on teachers’ salaries climbed slightly from 40% in 1981 to reach a peak of 50% in 1991. In contrast, the spending on other workers’salaries reduced gradually from 28% in 1981 to 22% in 1991. In the next ten years, there was a continuous decrease, in the wages of teachers and other workers, from 50% and 22% in 1991 to 45% and 15% in 2001, respectively.
The pie charts below
show
the proportion of the total school expenditure in five differences sources over the periods between 1981 and 2001.

Overall
, it is
clear
that most of the money spent on teachers’ salaries.
Otherwise
, the percentage of other workers’ salaries
reduced
gradually
over 20 years.

There was a slight increase in rates of insurance from 2% in 1981, 3% in 1991 to 8% in 2001. The spending on furniture and equipment dropped
quickly
from 15% in 1981 to 5 % in 1991
before
reached the point of 23% in 2001. There was a
small
rise in the proportion of resources and books from 15% in 1981 to 20 % in 1991
before
dramatic fall to 9% in 2001.

The expenditure on teachers’ salaries climbed
slightly
from 40% in 1981 to reach a peak of 50% in 1991.
In contrast
, the spending on other workers’salaries
reduced
gradually
from 28% in 1981 to 22% in 1991. In the
next
ten years, there was a continuous decrease, in the wages of teachers and other workers, from 50% and 22% in 1991 to 45% and 15% in 2001,
respectively
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The pie charts below show the proportion of the whole school expenditure in five differences sources over the periods between 1981 and 2001. v. 2

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188 words
6.5
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