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The pie charts below show the highest level of education achieved by people over age 21 in two different countries.

The pie charts below show the highest level of education achieved by people over age 21 in two different countries. Nmr2W
The pie charts illustrate the top five levels of education reached by adults in two countries. Overall, it is clear that in both countries, most of the adults had at least some education, and the percentages of people who had no education were the same. In country A, nearly half of adult population entered secondary school, accounting for the largest proportion. Following this, vocational technology had the second largest percentage of students, at about 30%. While only 15% of adult ended their studies after primary school, the figures for levels of higher education and no education were the lowest, 5% for each. In terms of country B, the highest percentage was seen in secondary school, with 35% of population pursuing their education, compared to 30% of people studied at vocational technical school. One fourth of population got a degree at university. By contrast, the proportions of people stopped after primary school and had no education were the same, at exactly 5%.
The pie charts illustrate the top five levels of
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reached by
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in two countries.

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, it is
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that in both countries, most of the
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had at least
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, and the percentages of
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who had no
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were the same.

In country A,
nearly
half of adult population entered secondary
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, accounting for the largest proportion. Following this, vocational technology had the second largest percentage of students, at about 30%. While
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15% of adult ended their studies after primary
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, the figures for levels of higher
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and no
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were the lowest, 5% for each.

In terms of country B, the highest percentage was
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in secondary
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, with 35% of population pursuing their
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, compared to 30% of
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studied at vocational technical
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. One fourth of population
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a degree at university. By contrast, the proportions of
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after primary
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school
and had no
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were the same, at exactly 5%.
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IELTS academic The pie charts below show the highest level of education achieved by people over age 21 in two different countries.

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