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the pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

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The pie charts compare the six distinct types of the production of energy in France in 1995 and 2005. Overall, it is clear that coal was the most produced energy while the others were the least produced energy in both years, and all genres were increased except petro energy. In terms of coal, the production for this category rose slightly, in 2005 with 30. 93%, as compared to in 1995 when it was 29. 80%. Moreover, gas production showed a minimal rise from 29. 63% to 30. 31% from 1995 to 2005. By contrast, there was a significant difference in petro production from 29. 27% to 19. 55%. Regarding, nuclear and others, both of them rose roughly by 5%, with 6. 40% and 4. 90% in 1995, as compared to 10. 10% and 9. 10% in 2005, sequentially.
The pie charts compare the six distinct types of the
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of energy in France in 1995 and 2005.

Overall
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that coal was the most produced energy while the others were the least produced energy in both years, and all genres
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petro
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In terms of coal, the
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for this category rose
slightly
, in 2005 with 30. 93%, as compared to in 1995 when it was 29. 80%.
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, gas
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a minimal rise from 29. 63% to 30. 31% from 1995 to 2005. By contrast, there was a significant difference in
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petro
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from 29. 27% to 19. 55%.

Regarding, nuclear
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, both of them rose roughly by 5%, with 6. 40% and 4. 90% in 1995, as compared to 10. 10% and 9. 10% in 2005,
sequentially
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IELTS academic the pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

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