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REVENUE SOURCED AND EXPENDITURES OF A USA CHARITY IN ONE YEAR 2016

REVENUE SOURCED AND EXPENDITURES OF A USA CHARITY IN ONE YEAR 2016 6OEr

The pie chart illustrates the amount of money earn and spent on children's charity in the USA in 2016. In revenue sources, the majority of money comes from donated food which accounted for 86. 6 percent. Follow by community contributions which were 10. 4 %. The other three sources that made up only 0. 2-04% were investment income, government grants, and others. In expenditures, the majority of spent was program services which accounted for 95. 8 percent. fundraising made up for 2. 6%. The minority of spent was in management and general which was only 1. 6%

The pie chart illustrates the amount of money earn and spent on children's charity in the USA in 2016.

In revenue sources, the majority of money This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :approachesarrives
comes
 from donated food which accounted for 86. 6 percent. Follow by community contributions which were 10. 4 %. The other three sources that made up This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 0. 2-04% were investment income, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritypublic authority
government
 grants, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:and many more
and others
.

In expenditures, the majority of spent was program services which accounted for 95. 8 percent. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterFundraising
fundraising
 made up for 2. 6%. The minority of spent was in management and general which was This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 1. 6%

IELTS academic REVENUE SOURCED AND EXPENDITURES OF A USA CHARITY IN ONE YEAR 2016

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American English

3 paragraphs

96 words

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