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The maps show changes that took place in Youngsville in New Zealand over a 25 year period from 1980 to 2005.

The maps show changes that took place in Youngsville in New Zealand over a 25 year period from 1980 to 2005. Dpmm
The diagrams demonstrate a number of improvements which took place in Youngsville, New Zealand during a period of 25 years. As can be seen in the diagrams, that were completely transformed in number of different ways. The most notable changes were the addition and reconstruction of the railway over the period shown. In the period between 1980 and 2005, a housings and a trees at the south were demolished and replaced by the skyscrapers. Moreover, in the first diagram, the railway was not had completely, so during a period, it was built to work. The stadium, the parking lot and the new railway were replaced by the housings at the north. In order to serve citizens, who did all activities outside. There was cut down a few trees enough to built one more parking lot and celebrate more activities such as: rowing in the lake, playing golf next to their. Looking at the remaining diagrams, the woodland was chopped down to make way for a factories. Furthermore, a new industrial was construced and replaced by the housings and the trees. At the south of the railway, the housings replaced by the factory and the warehouse was next to it.
The diagrams demonstrate a number of improvements which took place in
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Youngsville
, New Zealand during a
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of 25 years. As can be
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seen
in the diagrams, that were completely transformed in number of
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different
ways. The most notable
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changes
were the addition and reconstruction of the
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railway
over the
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period
shown. In the
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period
between 1980 and 2005, a housings and
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a trees
at the south
were demolished
and replaced by the skyscrapers.
Moreover
, in the
first
diagram, the
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railway
was not had completely,
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so
during a
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period
, it
was built
to work. The stadium, the parking lot and the new
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railway
were replaced
by the housings at the north. In order to serve citizens, who did all activities outside. There was
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cut
down a few trees
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enough
to built one more parking lot and celebrate more activities such as: rowing in the lake, playing golf
next
to their. Looking at the remaining diagrams, the woodland
was chopped
down to
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make
way for
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a factories
.
Furthermore
, a new industrial was
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construced
and replaced by the housings and the trees. At the south of the
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railway
, the housings replaced by the factory and the warehouse was
next
to it.

IELTS academic The maps show changes that took place in Youngsville in New Zealand over a 25 year period from 1980 to 2005.

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