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The pie charts and table below show the percentage of tourists travelling to Australia and specific information regarding their staying period,accommodation and the purpose of visit.

The pie charts and table below show the percentage of tourists travelling to Australia and specific information regarding their staying period, accommodation and the purpose of visit. Wgqme
The pie and table charts illustrate the information about the proportion of tourism travelling to Australia ranging from from staying period, accommodation to purpose of visit. It is clearly seen that the percentage of traveller is 37% by Asia whereas second highest percentile of Europe with 35%. Moreover, not only other nations give preference to travel by 10% but also American people prefer to visit in Australia by 18%. Analyzing it further, maximum average length of stay is 16 days by USA tourists, and 7 days by Asia masses as well in the Europe nations the same average is double from Asia to 14 days on the contrary other nations like to stay with 10 days. Secondly, Asian people like to accommodation in 5-star hotels, and main activity is sightseeing of Asia ans also Europen tourists love to stay in 4-star hotels. Lastly, tourism of USA and other nations live in same accommodatiin, but the main activity of traveller is separated in light of the fact that American folks choose swimming /sunbathing and surfacing activity is preferred by other nations Overall, maximu percentage of Asia in order to travel purpose while average of stay is highest of USA people.
The pie and table charts illustrate the information about the proportion of tourism travelling to Australia ranging
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staying period, accommodation to purpose of visit.

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that the percentage of
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give preference to travel by 10%
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prefer to visit in Australia by 18%.

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is 16 days by USA tourists, and 7 days by Asia masses
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the same average is double from Asia to 14 days
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like to accommodation in 5-star hotels, and main activity is sightseeing of Asia ans
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in 4-star hotels.
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IELTS academic The pie charts and table below show the percentage of tourists travelling to Australia and specific information regarding their staying period, accommodation and the purpose of visit.

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