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The graph below shows permanent and long-term arrivals in New Zealand by country of origin in August of the years 2007 to 2009. Write a report of at least 150 words describing and comparing the data.

The graph below shows permanent and long-term arrivals in New Zealand by country of origin in August of the years 2007 to 2009. Write a report of at least 150 words describing and comparing the data. wM70e
The bar charts illustrate non-temporary and permanent arrivals in New Zealand by several countries from August 2007 to 2009. Firstly, in New Zealand, there was the incredibly highest number of USA population in August 2007, approximately 320 people. While there was the lowest member of Hongkong in 2007 including 2 years later, there were around 50 citizens. The situation of Hong Kong population number particularly similar to the steady proportion of France citizens. However, Canada and USA arrivals in New Zealand considerably fluctuated over a 3-year period. From 2007 to 2008, the number of Mid China residents significantly rose by 250, from 300 to 490, considerably reached its peak at 550 in 2009. with increasing number of Mid China people resulted in the highest number between 2008 to 2009. Additionally, the average of Germany population slightly climbed by 50 in August 2008 to 2009. Overall, the population of Mid China is rapidly increasing. It is able to predict that the number of Mid-China people is likely to skyrocket in the next decades.
The bar charts illustrate non-temporary and permanent arrivals in New Zealand by several countries from August 2007 to 2009.

Firstly
, in New Zealand, there was the
incredibly
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highest
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number
of USA
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population
in August 2007, approximately 320
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people
. While there was the lowest member of
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Hongkong
in 2007 including 2 years later, there were around 50 citizens. The situation of Hong Kong
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population
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number
particularly
similar to the steady proportion of France citizens.
However
, Canada and USA arrivals in New Zealand
considerably
fluctuated over a 3-year period.

From 2007 to 2008, the
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number
of Mid China residents
significantly
rose by 250, from 300 to 490,
considerably
reached its peak at 550 in 2009.
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with
increasing
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number
of Mid China
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people
resulted in the highest
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number
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between 2008 to 2009
.
Additionally
, the average of Germany
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population
slightly
climbed by 50 in August 2008 to 2009.

Overall
, the
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population
of Mid China is
rapidly
increasing. It is able to predict that the
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number
of Mid-China
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people
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is
likely to skyrocket in the
next
decades.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows permanent and long-term arrivals in New Zealand by country of origin in August of the years 2007 to 2009. Write a report of at least 150 words describing and comparing the data.

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