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The table reveals statistics the figures of men and women in six sectors of the workforce in New Zealand in two various years.

The table reveals statistics the figures of men and women in six sectors of the workforce in New Zealand in two various years. 2xK9o
The table reveals statistics the figures of men and women in six sectors of the workforce in New Zealand in two various years. Overall, it is clear that the highest proportion of men and women in the workforce was recorded in services and transport, and agriculture in 1993, while there was an increase dramatically for the percentage of men and women working in business over the period. As shown in the table, just over half of women and approximately 20 percent of men in the workforce were employed in services and transport in 1993. In 2003, the figure for females decreased to 36 percent, whereas there was a rose significantly for the proportion of males to the same figure as females. In addition, the percentage of women and men were occupied at 22 percent and 38 percent respectively. However, this figure had a declined sustainability for male agricultural workers by 2003, accounting for 8 percent. There was a dramatic increase in the figures for women and men working in business, from 1 percent and 7 percent in 1993 to 21 percent and 38 percent in 2003 respectively. In contrast, the male and female workforce in manufacturing, building, and social services remained comparatively constant. Particularly, the proportion of these three regions is just below 20 percent in both years, especially, in 2003, women were employed in building for the first time, measuring at 6 percent.
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in six sectors of the
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in New Zealand in two various years.

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that the highest proportion of
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was recorded
in services and transport, and agriculture in 1993, while there was an increase
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working in business over the period.

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in the
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were employed
in services and transport in 1993. In 2003, the
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for females decreased to 36
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, whereas there was a rose
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as females.
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and 38
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had a declined sustainability for male agricultural workers by 2003, accounting for 8 percent.

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and 7
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in 1993 to 21
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and 38
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in 2003
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in manufacturing, building, and social services remained
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IELTS academic The table reveals statistics the figures of men and women in six sectors of the workforce in New Zealand in two various years.

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