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The pie chart shows the main reasons for land degradation globally while the table elaborates more on the causes of this issue within North America, Europe and Oceania.

The pie chart shows the main reasons for land degradation globally while the table elaborates more on the causes of this issue within North America, Europe and Oceania. bDpWB
In general, farming practices have been found to account for most of the land degradation worldwide. Furthermore, while Europe is most affected by this phenomenon, North America is shown to be least affected among the regions listed. Focusing on the main features of the pie chart, deforestation and overgrazing account for virtually the same proportions of land degradation in the world, with 30% and 35% respectively. In stark contrast, other factors have been proven to make up a mere 7% of global land degradation, which is four times as little as degradation caused by overcultivation. As for the individual regions in question, deforestation is responsible for less than 2% of land degradation in North America and Oceania while in Europe it accounts for just under 10% of this issue. Interestingly, overcultivation has zero effect on land in Oceania although it makes up over a tenth of degradation combined in the other regions. Conversely, Oceania seems to suffer most from over-grazing in the form of land degradation with the percentage standing at around 11%.
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, farming practices have
been found
to account for most of the
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land
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degradation
worldwide.
Furthermore
, while Europe is most
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affected
by this phenomenon, North America
is shown
to be least
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affected
among the regions listed.

Focusing on the main features of the pie chart, deforestation and overgrazing account for
virtually
the same proportions of
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land
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degradation
in the world, with 30% and 35%
respectively
. In stark contrast, other factors have
been proven
to
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make
up a mere 7% of global
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land
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degradation
, which is four times as
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little
as
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degradation
caused by
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overcultivation
.

As for the individual regions in question, deforestation is responsible for less than 2% of
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land
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degradation
in North America and Oceania while in Europe it accounts for
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under 10% of this issue.
Interestingly
,
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overcultivation
has zero effect on
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land
in Oceania although it
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makes
up over a tenth of
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degradation
combined in the other regions.
Conversely
, Oceania seems to suffer most from over-grazing in the form of
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land
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degradation
with the percentage standing at around 11%.
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IELTS academic The pie chart shows the main reasons for land degradation globally while the table elaborates more on the causes of this issue within North America, Europe and Oceania.

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