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The pie chart shows the information about the china regarding the expenditure from 1995 to 2011.

The pie chart shows the information about the china regarding the expenditure from 1995 to 2011. 30Nel
The two pie chart depicts the information about the percentage of household budget for necessities in China between 1995 and 2011. After analyze the data, it can be seen clearly that individuals spent spent money of the total income on household goods that 68% in 1995 but after the 16 years that percentile was decline by 9%. However, in China people spending on the medicine was almost identical in both the year that about 18 respectively. The pie further collates that in 1995 masses spend money on cloths accounted at 4% on the contrary, in 2011 this ratio was multiply 3 times than pervious percentage. while,
The two pie chart depicts the information about the percentage of household budget for necessities in China between 1995 and 2011.

After analyze the data, it can be
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seen
clearly
that individuals
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spent spent
money of the total income on household
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goods
that 68% in 1995
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but
after the 16 years that percentile was decline by 9%.
However
, in China
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people
spending on the medicine was almost identical in both the year that about 18
respectively
.

The pie
further
collates that in 1995 masses spend money on cloths accounted at 4%
on the contrary
, in 2011 this ratio was multiply 3
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times
than
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pervious
percentage.
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while
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IELTS academic The pie chart shows the information about the china regarding the expenditure from 1995 to 2011.

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  American English
3 paragraphs
106 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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