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The pie chart shows the expenditure of people of a country in year 2000 and 2010.

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The pie chart compares the spending of the individuals of a nation on various task between year 2000 and 2010. The data is provided in percentage. Overall, it can be elucidated that in the year 2000 there was significant expenditure on education and after 10 years the disbursemnet changed to travelling; whereas, during both years the least spended were footwear and clothing. Initially, in the year 2000, the high amount of money almost 34% was spent on the education which significantly reduced with the time span of 10 years, to 20%. Although, the travelling expenses raised almost 10%, which was 25% during the year 2000 and inclined to 35% in 2010. However, the Health sector shared a similar amount of money spent during both the years, that was 15%; While the disbursement spent on the restraunts and hotels had a tiny increase within 10 years, that is 16% in 2000 and 17% in 2010. Furthermore, the lowest spent activity was footwear and clothing during year 2000 and 2010, 10% and 13% respectively.
The pie chart compares the spending of the individuals of a nation on various task between
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2000 and 2010. The data
is provided
in percentage.

Overall
, it can
be elucidated
that in the
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year
2000 there was significant expenditure on education and after 10 years the
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disbursemnet
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to travelling; whereas, during both years the least
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were footwear and clothing.

Initially
, in the
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year
2000, the high amount of money almost 34% was
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spent
on the education which
significantly
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reduced
with the time span of 10 years, to 20%. Although, the travelling expenses raised almost 10%, which was 25% during the
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year
2000 and inclined to 35% in 2010.
However
, the Health sector shared a similar amount of money
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spent
during both the years, that was 15%; While the disbursement
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spent
on the
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restraunts
and hotels had a tiny increase within 10 years,
that is
16% in 2000 and 17% in 2010.
Furthermore
, the lowest
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activity was footwear and clothing during
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year
2000 and 2010, 10% and 13%
respectively
.
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IELTS academic The pie chart shows the expenditure of people of a country in year 2000 and 2010.

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