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The pie chart shows adult population in the USA by race/ethnicity according to a census in 1997.

The pie chart shows adult population in the USA by race/ethnicity according to a census in 1997. aQRyw
The pie chart depicts the information regarding the ethnic division of adult people in USA as per the survey conducted in the year 1997. The has been calibrated in percentage. After analysing, it can be seen clearly that the largest percentage of people who lived in US was that of White Non-Hispanics (76. 0%). On the other hand, ratio of Native Americans was the lowest than all other ethnic groups that is merely 1%. Following that, the miscellaneous category had the second least ratio with 3%. The pie chart further collate that, the Black Non-Hispanic ethnic group was the second largest race after the White Non-Hispanics. Besides this, the proportion of Hispanic race was 2% less than the Black Non-Hispanics (11%) and the total ratio of Hispanics was 9%. Overall, it can be noticed that the maximum percentage of adult people in US on the basis of ethnic division was the White Non-Hispanics followed by Black Non Hispanics and Hispanics. Whereas, the Native Americans was the least as compare to the other ethnic groups.
The pie chart depicts the information regarding the
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division of adult
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in USA
as per the survey conducted in the year 1997. The has
been calibrated
in percentage. After
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, it can be
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that the largest percentage of
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people
who
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lived
in US was that of White Non-Hispanics (76. 0%).
On the other hand
, ratio of Native Americans was the lowest than all other
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ethnic
groups
that is
merely
1%. Following that, the miscellaneous category had the second least ratio with 3%. The pie chart
further
collate that, the Black Non-Hispanic
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ethnic
group was the second largest race after the White Non-Hispanics.
Besides
this, the proportion of Hispanic race was 2% less than the Black Non-Hispanics (11%) and the total ratio of Hispanics was 9%.

Overall
, it can
be noticed
that the maximum percentage of adult
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people
in US on the basis of
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ethnic
division was the White Non-Hispanics followed by Black Non Hispanics and Hispanics. Whereas, the Native Americans was the least as compare to the other
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ethnic
groups.
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IELTS academic The pie chart shows adult population in the USA by race/ethnicity according to a census in 1997.

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  American English
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174 words
6.0
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