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The Pie Chart reveals the employment of Anthropology Graduates after completing their undergraduate studies from a University and the table beneath it tells about the wages of graduates after 5 years of their carrier.

The Pie Chart reveals the employment of Anthropology Graduates after completing their undergraduate studies from a University and the table beneath it tells about the wages of graduates after 5 years of their carrier. The Pie chart points towards the fate of the undergrad students. Half of the students started working full time after their graduation. 15% of them went into part-time shifts. 12% of them remained unemployed. The full-time postgraduate ones were 8% with unknowns on the same level. And the double doer was the least with 5% who took the hard decision to work part-time as well as continue their post-grad studies. While after 5 years in their carrier, the salaries of the Anthropology graduates were pretty smart. The ones working in private companies were 10% taking in between $25, 000 to $49, 000, while those of them working as freelancers and in government sectors stood at 5% getting the same figures. Quite a proportion of them lied in between $50, 000 to $75, 000 with most of the ones working in the private sector and a half in other sectors. A bit higher than the previous of them were taking in between $75, 000 to $1 lac with the most of them working as freelancers and almost 25% to 30% of them working in other sectors. Maximum of them were making more than $100, 000 with 50% of them working in government organizations and 30% to 40% of them working in private companies and freelancers respectively.
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about the wages of graduates after 5 years of their carrier.

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full time after their graduation. 15% of them went into part-time shifts. 12% of them remained unemployed. The full-time postgraduate
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were 8% with unknowns on the same level. And the double doer was the least with 5% who took the
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decision to work part-time
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in private
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were 10% taking in between $25, 000 to $49, 000, while those of them
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as freelancers and in
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government
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stood at 5% getting the same figures. Quite a proportion of them lied in between $50, 000 to $75, 000 with most of the
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and a half in other
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. A bit higher than
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them were taking in between $75, 000 to $1 lac with the most of them
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as freelancers and almost 25% to 30% of them
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in other
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organizations and 30% to 40% of them
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IELTS academic The Pie Chart reveals the employment of Anthropology Graduates after completing their undergraduate studies from a University and the table beneath it tells about the wages of graduates after 5 years of their carrier.

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