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The charts compare the expenditure trends of British citizens in 1971 with that in 2001.

The charts compare the expenditure trends of British citizens in 1971 with that in 2001. Overall, Petrol seemed to be a dominating expense in 1971 whereas in 2001, this was replaced with the purchase of cars. People of UK spent the most on Petrol and furniture in 1971 with 36% and 32% spendings respectively followed by expenditure in restaurants. Although Pounds spent on computers stood at 7% only in 1971. The spendings in 2001 were more diverse with the percentage expenditure divided among 7 categories as compared to only 4 in 1971. The automobile industry received about 43% of the total money spent by British people. Furthermore, the food and restaurant expenses were the second largest after cars, followed by spendings on computers which rose from 7% in 1971 to 12% in 2001. However, expenditures on petrol and furnitures shrank from 36%, 32% respectively to 8% in 2001. Additionally, 1% of UK citizens also spent on books. It is interesting to note that the percentage spendings of people of UK changed dramatically from 1971 to 2001, with fall in proportional expenditures in some and rise in others.
The charts compare the
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trends of British citizens in 1971 with that in 2001.
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, Petrol seemed to be a dominating expense in 1971 whereas in 2001, this
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with the
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purchase
of cars.

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the most on Petrol and furniture in 1971 with 36% and 32%
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on computers stood at 7%
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in 1971.

The
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in 2001 were more diverse with the percentage
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divided among 7 categories as compared to
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4 in 1971. The automobile industry received about 43% of the total money
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computers which rose from 7% in 1971 to 12% in 2001.
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,
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on petrol and
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shrank from 36%, 32%
respectively
to 8% in 2001.
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on books.

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