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The pie chart illustrates on the electricity production from different sources of fuel in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.

The pie chart illustrates on the electricity production from different sources of fuel in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. xQWg
According to the pie chart in Australia there were 20 units and 10 units of electricity produced by natural gas and oil however in 2000 the demand for these sources decreased by 18 and 8 units. moreover there was a slight rise in hydropower in 2000. On the other hand in France oil, natural gas and coal were the main source of electricity but over the years the use of nuclear power rapidly increased by 111 units. while hydropower’s remained stable throughout the years. Overall coal was the main source of electricity production in Australia in both the years while nuclear power is used more in France in recent years.
According to the pie chart in Australia there were 20
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and 10
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of electricity produced by natural gas and oil
however
in 2000 the demand for these sources decreased by 18 and 8
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there was a slight rise in hydropower in 2000.

On the other hand
in France oil, natural gas and coal were the main source of electricity
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over the years the
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of nuclear power
rapidly
increased by 111
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units
.
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while
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hydropower’s
remained stable throughout the years.

Overall
coal was the main source of electricity production in Australia in both the years while nuclear power is
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used
more in France in recent years.

IELTS academic The pie chart illustrates on the electricity production from different sources of fuel in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.

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