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The following maps show the changes that have taken place in Sydney International Airport since 1930. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The first given plan delineates the layout of Sydney International Airport in 1930 and the second illustration demonstrates changes in the airport since 1938. Overall, it crystal-clear that that area has been undergone significant changes over the given period. First of all, in 1930, the airport was located between Boston bay toward the south and a road linked with Sydney toward the north. Additionally, that airport had just one terminal with a runway nearby. Also, a river running from the north to south was stimulated on the west side of the terminal. The second map shows that the present Sydney Airport had expended road running from Canberra to Sydney. Terminal has become the International Terminal. A domestic terminal has been built on the east side of the old runway which has been known as runway-1. New runways, namely runway-2 and runway-3, have been added to a south side of the terminals. It is seen that two new car parks linked with the main road has been made and also the new airport has had a hotel stimulated between the river and International terminal. Lastly, over the period Both the river and Boston Bay has remained stable.
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plan delineates the layout of Sydney International
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Airport
in 1930 and the second illustration demonstrates
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changes
in the
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airport
since 1938.
Overall
,
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that that area has been undergone significant
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changes
over the
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period.

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, in 1930, the
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airport
was located
between Boston bay toward the south and a road linked with Sydney toward the north.
Additionally
, that
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airport
had
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just
one
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terminal
with a
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runway
nearby.
Also
, a river running from the north to south
was stimulated
on the west side of the terminal.

The second map
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that the present Sydney
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Airport
had expended road running from Canberra to Sydney.
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Terminal
has become the International
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Terminal
. A domestic
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terminal
has
been built
on the east side of the
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old
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runway
which has
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runway-1
. New
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runways
,
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runway-2
and
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runway-3
, have been
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added
to a south side of the
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. It is
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seen
that two new car parks linked with the main road has
been made
and
also
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airport
has had a hotel stimulated between the river and International
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terminal
.
Lastly
, over the period Both the river and Boston Bay has remained stable.
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IELTS academic The following maps show the changes that have taken place in Sydney International Airport since 1930.

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