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The pie chart illustrates how many qualifications did graduates get at a firm related to engineer in 1998 and 2008.

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The pie chart illustrates how many qualifications did graduates get at a firm related to engineer in 1998 and 2008. Overall, there were declines in the number of people getting the first dregree of science and art, while that of graduates getting other kinds of degree grew, except for master’s degree in science catelogy. The number of employees who have their first degree in science and art nearly halved, from 25% and 20% to 11% and 10% respectively. This led to a significant growth in the figure for PhD: science, which doubled to 30%, making this qualifications the most prevalent in the company. Meanwhile, about 2% of people got PhD: Art in 1998, followed by a slight rise of 5% in the next decade. This trend also can be seen in that of art master’s degree, which rose only by 2% to 13%. In contrast, the figure for those owning scientific master’s degree stayed unchanged throughout the period.
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stayed unchanged throughout the period.
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