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The pie chart below shows the information about accessing the news in two canada and Australia

The pie chart below shows the information about accessing the news in two canada and Australia 7Wo5A
A glance at the given pie chart compares the information about how to the Canadian and Australian denizens acquired news by various kind of resources. Overall, it could be observed from the chart that, majority of Canadians getting news from TV. While, in Australia people accessing the news through online resources. However, not specified is least one in both countries. To begin with, 52% of Australian people finding out the news through online resources. Whereas, more than a third Canadian people getting news through online. Followed by, both Australian and Canadian individuals acquired news from television with 37% and 40%, respectively. Further, 14% of Canadian inhabitants receiving news by printing. While, half than 14% Australians receiving news by it. Furthermore, 2% of least Australian people obtained news from radio and not specified. On the other hand, 3% and 7% Canadians occupied news from radio and not specified.
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from television with 37% and 40%,
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IELTS academic The pie chart below shows the information about accessing the news in two canada and Australia

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3 paragraphs
147 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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