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The line graph illustrates the amount of money by city council gave to book clubs and how these amount of money and the number of books changed over a four-year period.

The line graph illustrates the amount of money by city council gave to book clubs and how these amount of money and the number of books changed over a four-year period. LGV9r
The line graph illustrates the amount of money by city council gave to book clubs and how these amount of money and the number of books changed over a four-year period. Overall, we can see the amount of money donations by city council to book clubs and the number of book club members was increase trend over observation period all time. Despite some minor variations. In the first two-year stage, the mount of money given to book clubs increased steadily, this figure rose from 20. 000 pound to about 23. 000 pound in the end of the second year. However, in over the same period the number of book club members decreased slightly from 6000 books to nearly 5000 books. During the following years, the amount of money donation by city council rose significantly, this figure reached a peak about 40. 000 pound, although this figure then declined, to about 35. 000 pound in the end of period. Beside that, the number of book club members also extended rapidly, accounting for approximately 12. 000 books in the end of fourth year.
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donations by city council to
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members was increase trend over observation period all time. Despite
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donation by city council rose
significantly
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, although this figure then declined, to about 35. 000
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IELTS academic The line graph illustrates the amount of money by city council gave to book clubs and how these amount of money and the number of books changed over a four-year period.

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