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The pie chart below show reasons why people left the UK for other countries and why people stayed in the UK. v.2

The pie chart below show reasons why people left the UK for other countries and why people stayed in the UK. v. 2
The pie charts illustrate the reasons for people’s leaving and staying in the United Kingdom. Overall, it is evident that people in the UK tend to leave and stay for the same reasons: join the families and friends, employment, and financial reasons. In the first pie chart, there were five reasons for people’s leaving UK, joining families or friends, bad weather, employment, financial reasons and taxation. Of all these reasons, joining families or friends and bad weather played the biggest part, making up 63% in total (39% and 24% respectively). The percentage of employment (10%) was twice bigger than that of taxation (9%), which was almost as large as the proportion of financial reasons (10%). In the second graph, five reasons also explained why people stayed in the United Kingdom, join families and friends, language, employment, financial reasons, and healthcare. Joining families and friends and employment were the most important reasons for the dwellers deciding to stay in Britain, accounting for 62% in total (34% and 28% separately). The proportion of financial reasons (9%) was similar to that of the healthcare (10%).
The pie charts illustrate the
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leaving and staying in the United Kingdom.
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, it is evident that
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people
in the UK tend to
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leave
and stay for the same
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:
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join
the
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families
and
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friends
,
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employment
, and
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financial
reasons.

In the
first
pie chart, there were five
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reasons
for
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people’s
leaving UK, joining
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families
or
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friends
,
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bad
weather,
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employment
,
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financial
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reasons
and taxation. Of all these
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reasons
, joining
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families
or
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friends
and
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bad
weather played the biggest part, making up 63% in total (39% and 24%
respectively
). The percentage of
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employment
(10%) was twice bigger than that of taxation (9%), which was almost as large as the proportion of
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financial
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reasons
(10%).

In the second graph, five
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also
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explained
why
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people
stayed in the United Kingdom,
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join
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families
and
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friends
, language,
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employment
,
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financial
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reasons
, and healthcare. Joining
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families
and
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friends
and
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employment
were the most
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important
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reasons
for the dwellers deciding to stay in Britain, accounting for 62% in total (34% and 28%
separately
). The proportion of
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financial
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reasons
(9%) was similar to that of the healthcare (10%).
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
If we spoke a different language, we would perceive a somewhat different world.
Ludwig Wittgenstein

IELTS academic The pie chart below show reasons why people left the UK for other countries and why people stayed in the UK. v. 2

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3 paragraphs
182 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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