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The pie chart below show how teenagers in Japan and Australia spent their money in 2019.

The pie chart below show how teenagers in Japan and Australia spent their money in 2019. GrE8j

The given pie charts present the spending by adolescents on various things in two different nations in year of 2019. Overall, it is clear that teenagers in both countries spend the largest amount of their money in video games, food, and clothes, with a big interest in gaming for Japanese and food for Australian ones. Meanwhile the part of money spent on books was lowest in Japan and Australia. However Japan spend 37% on digital games, while food and clothes accounted for 22% and 20% respectively and only 9% money was used to buy books. Whereas Australians are more curious about food items with 37% chunk of money, while electronic games represented 22% of the expanses. In other hand, clothes were the second main interest for Australian teenagers with the quarter of the money. In conclusion, it is clearly visible that people did not pay more on books as Japanese spent 9%, respectively 8% by Australians.

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 nations in year of 2019.

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 in both countries spend the largest amount of their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsalarywagewealthpaybillcash
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food
, and clothes, with a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:hugeenormousgiganticvast
big
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food
 for Australian ones. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Meanwhile,
Meanwhile
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money
 spent on books was lowest in Japan and Australia.

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However
 Japan spend 37% on digital games, while You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfeedcuisinesnackmeatdrinkfoodstuff
food
 and clothes accounted for 22% and 20% respectively
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only
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money
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buy
 books. Whereas Australians are more curious about You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfeedcuisinesnackmeatdrinkfoodstuff
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, while electronic games represented 22% of the expanses. In other hand, clothes were the second main interest for Australian This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :juvenilesadolescents
teenagers
 with the quarter of the money.

In conclusion
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 8% by Australians. 