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The pie chart and table below given information on tourist arrivals in Nepal in March 2008

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The provided pie chart compares the proportion of travellers visiting Nepal in March, and the given table illustrates increasing numbers of tourists in 2007. In general, it can be observed that Asia and Europe tourists were the largest segment of Nepal’s tourism, whereas Australian only occupied the smallest part. Besides, the significant growth in tourism was Europians, on the contrary the Asia travellers witnessed the least rise in the whole period. In 2008, the largest portion was for Asia tourists at 38% and Europe category at 37% in comparison with a tiny fraction of people who travel to Nepal as North and South American, Australia and other regions accounted for 10%, 4% and 10% respectively. On the other hand, Eroupians want to travel to Nepal increasing by 3, 321 people in 2007, which outnumbered their other tourist counterparts by almost 3 to one. Being the second position in the increasing numbers, North and South America has a sustainable surge by 1, 043 people opposed to 188 tourists for Asia, 426 for Australia and 932 for other countries.
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visiting Nepal in March, and the
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table illustrates increasing numbers of
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in 2007.

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that Asia and Europe
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tourists
were the largest segment of Nepal’s tourism, whereas Australian
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occupied the smallest part.
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,
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witnessed the least rise in the whole period.

In 2008, the largest portion was for Asia
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tourists
at 38% and Europe category at 37%
in comparison
with a tiny fraction of
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people
who travel to Nepal as North and South American, Australia and
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other
regions accounted for 10%, 4% and 10%
respectively
.

On the
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hand,
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Eroupians
want to travel to Nepal increasing by 3, 321
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people
in 2007, which outnumbered their
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other
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tourist
counterparts by almost 3 to one. Being the second position in the increasing numbers, North and South America has a sustainable surge by 1, 043
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people
opposed to 188
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tourists
for Asia, 426 for Australia and 932 for
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other
countries.
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IELTS academic The pie chart and table below given information on tourist arrivals in Nepal in March 2008

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