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The diagram show he process of apple canning

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The diagram illustrates, how canned apple is produced. The process includes 14 stages from hand picking by farmers to dispatching the final product. The first step is that the farmers are picked apples. Seondly, that hand-picked apples are transported to the factory. Therby, they are washed them properly. Then, they are choosed the apples with good quality. After that, apples are kept ina cold store. After that step, th apple weighing and grading. Then tey are peled. Before they are canned, that peeled apples are corned to bottles. After sealing that bottles, athey are sertlized. Then tey are stored with a label. Finally they are dpatched the canned apple bvottles to the market.
The diagram illustrates, how canned
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apple
is produced
. The process includes 14 stages from
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hand picking
by farmers to dispatching the final product.

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The
first
step is that the farmers
are picked
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apples
.
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Seondly
, that hand-picked
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apples
are transported
to the factory.
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Therby
, they
are washed
them
properly
. Then, they are
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choosed
the
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apples
with
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good
quality. After that,
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apples
are
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kept
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ina
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cold
store.

After that step,
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th
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apple
weighing and grading. Then
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tey
are
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peled
.
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Before
they
are canned
, that peeled
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apples
are corned
to bottles. After sealing that bottles,
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athey
are
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sertlized
. Then
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tey
are stored
with a label.
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Finally
they are
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dpatched
the canned
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apple
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bvottles
to the market.
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IELTS academic The diagram show he process of apple canning

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
113 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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