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The diagram displays information about the sugar manufacture works for making sugar from sugar cane.

The diagram displays information about the sugar manufacture works for making sugar from sugar cane. LL3gn
The diagram displays information about the sugar manufacture works for making sugar from sugar cane. Generally, there are two main stages of sugar production, firstly sugar cane harvesting and secondly manufacturing process. Following this diagram, the source material of sugar production made by a sugar canes. Firstly, the farmer was planted the seed of sugar canes. After that, in 12-18 months it was growth and ready to harvest. Next, there two method of harvest, first by hand and second by a tractor. Following this, in the factory, the sugar canes was crushed by a crushing machine and it purified by a limestone filter to extract into the juice. Then, it heated by evaporator and altered to a syrup. Afterwards, the syrup was separated a sugar crystal by centrifuge. Eventually, the sugar crystal were got cooled and dried.
The diagram displays information about the
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sugar
manufacture works for making
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sugar
from
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sugar
cane.

Generally
, there are two main stages of
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sugar
production,
firstly
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sugar
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cane
harvesting and
secondly
manufacturing process.

Following this diagram, the source material of
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sugar
production made by a
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sugar
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canes
.
Firstly
, the farmer
was planted
the seed of
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sugar
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canes
. After that, in 12-18 months it was growth and ready to harvest.
Next
, there two method of harvest,
first
by hand and second by a tractor.

Following this, in the factory, the
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sugar
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canes
was crushed
by a crushing machine and it purified by a limestone filter to extract into the juice. Then, it heated by evaporator and altered to a syrup. Afterwards, the syrup
was separated
a
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sugar
crystal by centrifuge.
Eventually
, the
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sugar
crystal were
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got
cooled and dried.
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IELTS academic The diagram displays information about the sugar manufacture works for making sugar from sugar cane.

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137 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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